A cute idea, but it needs more...something. More cards would be good; I suggest having several in one flash, with slideshow controls or pause/play.
I like the card choice; the art, dark-type, and stats fit culex17 well. May I recommend adding a 'flip effect', since it is a 'monster/effect' card; 'flavor-text' about the person, or what they'd be like in the game universe, would be great!
Some of the clothes are good choices, and most of the others are okay for various tastes. i don't mind the fixed undies because of the warning in your comments; but PLEASE fix it so they end up UNDER things like the swimsuits!
An excellent beginning! I rarely review, but this is so well done I don't wish to pass it up.
Excellent symbolism, foreshadowing, and most of the other 'art critic' stuff. The transitions are classic. Even the humor with the chief was a nice touch! One thing I especially liked: giving some information to bring an understanding of the characters and situations, not so much nor in a way to slow the 'flow' for too long and bore us, yet barely enough to create curiousity and interest. (No, I'm not an English teacher!)
The sound quality, especially of voices, could be better, and SOMETIMES I see better clarity of drawing. Either one certainly would have brought a 10 -- which I almost rated anyway!
Best of luck; I hope your future endeavors are at least this professional, and that future chapters are in store!
Funny in a disturbing way! Dark comedy, kind of like _Heathers_. Very well done, and the white lines as if it were an old film was a cute touch.
Not sure what you could improve; I would have toned down the violence--but that's my style, you used the gore amazingly well.
Mostly wanted to point out that I see a subconscious pun, which bumped up my humor rating. Did you realize it's a portrayal of a girl "banging" "chicks"? HA!!!!
Wonderful! As sensible and sexy (tho w/out the sex) as TehKar, as cute as Kerrigan, and as gutsy (yet not annoying) as Foamy!!!
Thoroughly entertaining, especially if you can stand no porn and
no more violence than "Stop poking me!" Maybe I have a new favorite flash-er(?! sorry, flash-creator), after I look into her other subs and the story she made this for... (finding out how to impress those dates while I'm at it!)
Only two ways I'd think it was EVEN BETTER:
-even more variation under the "conversation" options and "talk to friends"--maybe connected to game progression?
-she does have a pussycat; could she play with it? maybe a mini-game, animation, or accessory to go with the dress-up (or a separate collection of minis related to Cup of Tea)? The innuendo alone would be funny, not to mention silly! (I can't wait to help her play with her ...kitty!) Basically, more jokes like "sex on the beach" would be great next time!
oh i love you! great suggestions! and wow, thanks for the comparisons *though um illwillpress and legendaryfrog don't know i exist or would care, lol!*
i love these suggestions and will definitely use them in the next game! thankies so much!!
Pretty good stuff, especially the rare but meaningful use of color. Nice job tracing, and fine work choosing the images. Altogether, it conveyed the idea very well!
You might consider adding a little animation in future works--not much, given it's manga, not anime, to life. For instance, having the mother's eyes fade to black rather than a sudden jump would better show her leaving her body, IMO.
When that's my only recommendation, you've done real good! I would love to see more along those lines, especially 1 or 2 more on Alchemist. Keep it up!! =^_^=
I liked it quite a bit. Nice dramatic elements, fight scene, action/adventure and all that. While I'm not fond of the super-saiyan-like (from DragonBall Z, for those who don't know) aspect of Sonic's ultimate form, you used it to good effect.
Only one thing took away from the feel: the ultra-close-ups. They throw me on any sprite movie, and you're far from the only one doing that so don't worry; just use it less, maybe don't magnify so much.
Most excellent humorousness, even the dark bit with the clown! The first one was like some in MAD magazine (& MadTV), so that was a nice treat.
In one of those scene-dividers, I could have sworn I saw Sonic's girl/friend, but I didn't want to take the time to go frame-by-frame and check. Cute, if it was!
jvbrown2
All 10 flash Reviews
Rated 4 / 5 stars January 29, 2008
Jhonen Vasquez would be rolling in his grave...
...laughing his fool head off! Would that be RIHGL?
Anyway, kudos to you. [hands you a candy bar] [what, no one remembers that brand?]
Rated 1.5 / 5 stars January 25, 2008
meh
A cute idea, but it needs more...something. More cards would be good; I suggest having several in one flash, with slideshow controls or pause/play.
I like the card choice; the art, dark-type, and stats fit culex17 well. May I recommend adding a 'flip effect', since it is a 'monster/effect' card; 'flavor-text' about the person, or what they'd be like in the game universe, would be great!
Best of luck!
Spolier: Season 2 premiere
Rated 2.5 / 5 stars January 25, 2008
So-so
Some of the clothes are good choices, and most of the others are okay for various tastes. i don't mind the fixed undies because of the warning in your comments; but PLEASE fix it so they end up UNDER things like the swimsuits!
Best of luck!
Rated 4.5 / 5 stars January 25, 2008
WONDERFUL!!
An excellent beginning! I rarely review, but this is so well done I don't wish to pass it up.
Excellent symbolism, foreshadowing, and most of the other 'art critic' stuff. The transitions are classic. Even the humor with the chief was a nice touch! One thing I especially liked: giving some information to bring an understanding of the characters and situations, not so much nor in a way to slow the 'flow' for too long and bore us, yet barely enough to create curiousity and interest. (No, I'm not an English teacher!)
The sound quality, especially of voices, could be better, and SOMETIMES I see better clarity of drawing. Either one certainly would have brought a 10 -- which I almost rated anyway!
Best of luck; I hope your future endeavors are at least this professional, and that future chapters are in store!
Rated 4 / 5 stars August 18, 2006
Wow that's creepy!!
Funny in a disturbing way! Dark comedy, kind of like _Heathers_. Very well done, and the white lines as if it were an old film was a cute touch.
Not sure what you could improve; I would have toned down the violence--but that's my style, you used the gore amazingly well.
Mostly wanted to point out that I see a subconscious pun, which bumped up my humor rating. Did you realize it's a portrayal of a girl "banging" "chicks"? HA!!!!
Rated 4.5 / 5 stars August 17, 2006
All hail the pseudo-awesomeness of Zim!
Wonderful! Sure, the animation could have been a hair smoother, but it was overall nigh-perfect!
"Aww, de li'l blue button don't work! *poke*"
(as GIR would say)
Rated 5 / 5 stars August 15, 2006
Yay Bomee!
Wonderful! As sensible and sexy (tho w/out the sex) as TehKar, as cute as Kerrigan, and as gutsy (yet not annoying) as Foamy!!!
Thoroughly entertaining, especially if you can stand no porn and
no more violence than "Stop poking me!" Maybe I have a new favorite flash-er(?! sorry, flash-creator), after I look into her other subs and the story she made this for... (finding out how to impress those dates while I'm at it!)
Only two ways I'd think it was EVEN BETTER:
-even more variation under the "conversation" options and "talk to friends"--maybe connected to game progression?
-she does have a pussycat; could she play with it? maybe a mini-game, animation, or accessory to go with the dress-up (or a separate collection of minis related to Cup of Tea)? The innuendo alone would be funny, not to mention silly! (I can't wait to help her play with her ...kitty!) Basically, more jokes like "sex on the beach" would be great next time!
oh i love you! great suggestions! and wow, thanks for the comparisons *though um illwillpress and legendaryfrog don't know i exist or would care, lol!*
i love these suggestions and will definitely use them in the next game! thankies so much!!
Rated 4.5 / 5 stars July 26, 2006
M2L sounds like a good idea
Pretty good stuff, especially the rare but meaningful use of color. Nice job tracing, and fine work choosing the images. Altogether, it conveyed the idea very well!
You might consider adding a little animation in future works--not much, given it's manga, not anime, to life. For instance, having the mother's eyes fade to black rather than a sudden jump would better show her leaving her body, IMO.
When that's my only recommendation, you've done real good! I would love to see more along those lines, especially 1 or 2 more on Alchemist. Keep it up!! =^_^=
Rated 4 / 5 stars July 25, 2006
Pretty dang good
I liked it quite a bit. Nice dramatic elements, fight scene, action/adventure and all that. While I'm not fond of the super-saiyan-like (from DragonBall Z, for those who don't know) aspect of Sonic's ultimate form, you used it to good effect.
Only one thing took away from the feel: the ultra-close-ups. They throw me on any sprite movie, and you're far from the only one doing that so don't worry; just use it less, maybe don't magnify so much.
Overall, good stuff!
Rated 4.5 / 5 stars July 25, 2006
Pretty sweet!
Most excellent humorousness, even the dark bit with the clown! The first one was like some in MAD magazine (& MadTV), so that was a nice treat.
In one of those scene-dividers, I could have sworn I saw Sonic's girl/friend, but I didn't want to take the time to go frame-by-frame and check. Cute, if it was!
Keep up the good work, even elsewhere!